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| (4.0)  Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! Title: Egg Author: cuckoo  Type: Poem You probably know the saying, "The incredible, edible egg!" And you just helped to prove it there. I doubt there are as many foods that are as versatile as an egg. Not only that but you can decorate them and even let them hatch and have baby chickens to raise and have more eggs, eat as chicken, or keep as a pet.  There really isn't much bad to say about an egg, except a few people seem to be intolerant to them, health wise. As far as the title, I might not use the word "egg" in it. It gives the poem away too soon, and the reader knows right away that it is about eggs. If you don't mention it right away, the reader stays engaged, wondering what it is you are writing about. Though I guess from your opening clues it won't take the reader long to figure it out. Other than suggesting that you use a little punctuation to make the poem easier to read, and maybe make the poem single-spaced (I really think it improves the aesthetic appeal of a poem) I don't really have any other suggestions. Now write one about toast. ** Image ID #1578663 Unavailable **
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