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Title: Greatness Be Born

Author: humble44

Type: Poem


I can see that each line begins in alphabetical order A-H, I'm not sure why you stopped at H, I suppose you got bored. Been there. *Smile*

The very first line confuses me:

After all a

I expected it to continue on the next line but it doesn't. So I am not sure what you intended for that line. But to be honest, I'm not sure what any of the poem is actually about. You say that it is just a "simple poem." But, it seems anything but. It's abstract quality, would seem to exclude it from a list of simplicity.

Maybe it carries a spiritual theme. These lines at least hint at it:

For a child born of the past
Given to the future
History to be at last

Though my connection is a bit murky, I can make one between this and the birth of the Jesus Christ. Still, that connection is a bit tenuous and odds are you didn't intend that at all. It is more likely just an attempt at abstract writing, where you probably have a general key,to the poem, but unfortunately the reader does not.

It's fun to try different styles as you've tried here.




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