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 Prey Open in new Window. [13+]
I try my hand at descriptive writing. A man is chased by a pack of wolfs.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi I.D.O.Y.
Well, this certainly is descriptive. The main things a writer wants to convey when he/she writes description are the senses, and you covered most of them here. Good job! I don't know why people are so afraid of wolves. Now bears, that's another story.
Great spelling and telling, but I did see one niggle:
'...struck another in the ribs(,) but it held on.'
That part about him talking to his 'mommy' was a nice touch. I also liked the part about wolf relieving him of his jaw, but hey, I'm a little sick in the head.
And don't worry about your 'introduction', but you want to finish your bioblock so we can know a little more about you. Up to you.
Keep on writing on, I.D.O.Y., and welcome to WdC!
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