I'm not really sure what it is this possible novel is supposed to be about. It is very well written and thought provoking but it doesn't give any real insight to what its about. I suggest writing some more of the story line you have in mind, then I and other readers could tell you if they want to read more. What is the conflict that this character faces? I think you should write this novel because it looks like you are a pretty good writer and would enjoy writing it, but I don't really know if I would read it or not.

Another thing is the dad and the uncle, you say that he was surprised by the way his dad reacted but its not clear why. His dad seems very upset but that's to be expected when you lose a loved one. I could see how he might be surprised by his dad's reaction if he thought his dad and his uncle weren't very close but he obviously knows that they were, "He had lost his best friend and brother in a car accident some weeks ago". So what was so surprising to him about his dad's reaction? Or was it that his dad was not upset at all? either way you should explain what the dad's reaction was and why it was so surprising. I might say something like "My dad was always so calm and collect, in just a few short hours he was reduced to a withering mess." or "I was surprised that my dad was taking the death of his brother and best friend so well."

You are a really good writer, you really just need to figure out how to sell your story. Not an easy thing to do, I certainly haven't mastered it ;), just need to catch your readers attention and then keep it. If you write a really compelling story in the beginning then the readers will stay with you even through the less interesting parts. So keep writing!

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