Review of showering acts of joy

Why I chose this piece I am getting into fiction and like the premise of what you are talking about

Overall impression of piece: You describe well

Grammatical and spelling errors. This is a three alarm fire. Don't write anymore until you fix this one. There are spelling and usage mistakes all over the page. Maybe I am not the most compulsive of crafter, but most of these should be fixed with electronic editing. You need to use it. An example of the numerous mistakes is that you misspelled stupid. It makes the piece hard to read and to discuss the creative ability that you obviously do have. At least 15-20 spelling errors

What I liked? You have a suspensful premise and interesting description

What I disliked You kind of go from the general to a specific group walking through Washington. In a short piece, this is difficult in that it is hard to really know whose story it is. Editor is non distinct. If this is Sonja's story let it be that

How the piece made me feelI think you have a huge vision for a story that is very big. It inspires me that you thought of this. I am not sure how reality based this is. I believe we are headed for a dark age where knowledge and technological increase will reverse. Of course that is just my crystal ball and not yours. I am an environmentalist

Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting.

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