Hello Samuel,
I have to tell you that I enjoyed reading your poem very much. You very creatively expressed your ideas about the lure of Magical power and the price to use it. The only line that seems awkward is line 8 (due to it being inverted to fit the rhyme). The rhythm flows well, through most of the lines, which begin with an anapestic foot. But as the third to last and the last lines begin with an iambic foot, it throws off the meter a bit at the end of the poem. Still, a very well written poem.