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Title:
fits the poem

Tone:
I found the tone to be monotonous. I didn't really "feel" an emotion when reading this. It didn't really "move" me in any way

Content:
This poem has very good content. The ideas captured in the poem are strong ideas, and images, but weren't quite formulated into the powerful poem it could be. The poem leaves no work for the reader, as all the symbols are explained.

Musicality:
The long second line didn't help with the rhythm of the beginning.

Good work putting down some interesting points about knowledge and the mind. I'd love to see some editing down.




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