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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Unratable.)
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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

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Emotional Feel:
Devilish !
Personal Experience:
Yes, as i feel that whenever a mature and clever person emotionally seduce an innocent and pure person, same thing happens. And to be very true i am no exception.
Style & Form:
Vampirical and Erotic.
Imagery:
Expressive.
Tone:
Seductive.
Setting:
Personal and Emotional.
Liking:
i like the most:

She fell from God's grace,
fell right to the ground.
It all happened so fast,
every inch, every pound.

Word Choice:
Fine yet it feels at some places bit obscure.
Flow & Rhythm:
Little bit obstructive.
Any Recommendation:
Yes. Whatever i say here is truly of my perception.

i feel second stanza is quite unclear as the words "deed, creed and pleasured herself" did not convey me exactly what you want to narrate. So, it must be more comprehensive. Secondly, in the second last and last line of the poem the use of "Had" seems over. i think the word "had" in last line or in the second last line can be replaced.
Memorable:
Thematically.
Overall:
A Good Read !

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