Sunni's Review &Edit - closed

Hello! :)
I want to eventually have my first novel published. I'm aware that it's not perfect at this stage, so I'd really love it if someone could review it and provide a short critique on how I can improve in order to submit for publishing.
My novel is called A VIRGIN TIDE and you'll find it in my portfolio. (Just click on the whole novel, not the static items of 'A Virgin Tide - Chapter 1' or 'A Virgin Tide - Chapter 2', the whole thing is under just plain 'A Virgin Tide'!!)
Also, I live in Australia so I'm not sure how I can contact/find out about the publishing world down under? I think this site only has links to American ones.
Thanks for any help you can give me!!
Willow xox