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Jan 2, 2023 at 7:47pm
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Re: Tink's Tools of the trade: Repetition
by Tinker Author IconMail Icon
Here is my Pantoum "Winter Adventure Tools of theTrade Repetition.

Winter Adventure

Welcome to the Glamis Dunes
the Sahara of Southern Cali,
Shifting sands beneath the moon,
thrills and spills in an off-road rally.

The Sahara of Southern Cali,
giant waves of sun-drenched sand,
thrills and spills in an off-road rally.
Dessert sport on a scale so grand.

Giant waves of sun-drenched sand,
families gather to camp in the round.
Dessert sport on a scale so grand,
all listening to the roaring sounds.

Families gather to camp in the round
I'm strapped in a steel cage on wheels,
all listening to the roaring sounds,
scary roller coaster ride is how it feels.

I'm strapped in a steel cage on wheels,
a heavy helmet plopped on my head,
scary roller coaster ride is how it feels,
dunes ten to twenty feet tall ahead.

A heavy helmet plopped on my head,
adventure over 80 is overrated,
dunes ten to twenty feet tall ahead
I'll not go again, though it wasn't hated.

Adventure over 80 is overrated.
shifting sands beneath the moon.
I'll not go again, though it wasn't hated.
Welcome to the Glamis dunes.
                    ~~Judi Van Gorder

I didn't read the end instructions at first and wrote this."I Hear You - Repetition - Tools of the Trade
Inspired by "Tools of the trade: Repetition"  
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Tools of the trade: Repetition · 01-02-23 2:28pm
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Re: Tools of the trade: Repetition · 01-02-23 3:18pm
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*Star* Re: Tink's Tools of the trade: Repetition · 01-02-23 7:47pm
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Re: Re: Tink's Tools of the trade: Repetition · 01-03-23 8:42am
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