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Jul 8, 2020 at 2:27pm
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Edited: July 8, 2020 at 2:28pm
Re: Jake's corona pantoum
by Dave Author IconMail Icon
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So true!

First two stanzas are good, but last stanza breaks pattern of repetition: Second and fourth lines of second stanza should be first and third lines of third stanza. The trick of this form is to maintain that pattern while keeping the narrative comprehensible.

Let the creativity flow from your soul! *Cool*
Dave
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corona pantoum · 07-08-20 1:05am
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*Star* Re: Jake's corona pantoum · 07-08-20 2:27pm
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