~ The Poet's Place Cafe~

Thanks Dave, I was thinking is my poem too much a poem for Playground Rhyme? I'm Ok with the poem, I kind of like it. But as a Playground Rhyme does it really fit? Should it have been simpler, something like

cat hunting frogs
down in the bog
bog frog

pup takes a romp
down in the swamp
swamp romp

scraping my knees
up in the trees
tree knees

she takes a spill
up on the hill
hill spill

stepping on the gritty
down in the city
city gritty

what can I learn
down in the burn?
burn learn
~~jvg