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Aug 2, 2019 at 10:31am
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Edited: August 2, 2019 at 10:52am
Re: Jake's Little Willie's Poem
by Tinker Author IconMail Icon
Well, this is twisted all right. But where is the humor? That is key to this verse form.

Went to the movies last night with friends and saw Once Upon a Time in Hollywood, a Tarrantino movie. It had a lot of twisted humor, the kind of thing that makes you cringe and exclaim Oh, my God! and yet laugh at the same time. It is the unexpected that makes you laugh not the actual act of using a flame thrower to incinerate a Manson family, hippy girl while she is in your swimming pool. OMG, I actually laughed out loud in the theater as did the rest of the audience.*Blush*

It's that kind of circumstance you want to put Little Willie in and work on the rhythm and rhyme later.

*Laugh*I had a very tough time with this form too and I'm not satisfied with what I've produced yet, but I keep on trying. You need to too.

Little Willie had a good friend, Jake,
who wrote an unfunny ruthless rhyme.
He tried to laugh for Jake's sake
then covered him with slime.

See I still have a long way to go but I keep trying.

~~Tink
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Jake's Little Willie's Poem · 08-02-19 4:17am
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*Star* Re: Jake's Little Willie's Poem · 08-02-19 10:31am
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Re: Jake's Little Willie's Poem · 08-02-19 11:24am
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Re: Re: Jake's Little Willie's Poem · 08-02-19 11:29am
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