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Intriguing bit of intrigue here.

Rhyme scheme spot on, but syllable counts are off in some lines:

The structure consists of 12 lines with line structures of 2-3-4-6-8-10-10-8-6-4-3-2 .

World - 1 syllable, should be 2
All furled - 2 syllables, should be 3
been taken over
By the world security rover - 9 syllables, should be 6
the eye in the sky watches us all - 9 syllables, should be 8
the national security state crystal ball - 12 syllables, should be 10
puts us all under its cosmic pall - 9 syllables, should be 10
from its secret headquarters mall - 7 syllables, should be 8
the red cosmic sky eye
` the eye in the bright sky - 6 syllables, should be 4
watches us all - 4 syllables, should be 3
the wall

Let the creativity flow from your soul!
Dave
"The Poet's Place "