Discussions At The Garden Bench

Lesson 4 discussion questions according to my experiences and knowledge.

1. Let's talk a little bit more about the LY adverbs we examined in Lesson Three. Scroll down and read the version of Circle of Life below. How many LY adverbs did you see?
found 2 ly adverbs.

2. Do you think the story's meaning was lost, or the imagery was diminished with the lack of LY adverb use?
No not for me, because the story had the same meaning in a more concise manner using words which kept my interest and added variety to my reading experience. The ly words were over used and for me a bit distracting. The writing seemed a bit immature for my level of reading ability, however depending on the target audience in moderation this would work very nicely. Knowing who the target audience is will make a difference on how the information is written.

3. Did you think this version of Circle of Life was easier or harder to understand than Lesson Three's version? Why?
This version was equally understandable. The difference for me was the presentation of the first seemed to be directed to a younger or less experienced reader. The more concise version in lesson 4 seemed to be more for a reader who has a good understanding of sentence structure, a good vocabulary, and is familiar with proper use of the English language. This seems to be written for a more mature audience.

4. Find a piece of your own work that is heavily sprinkled with unnecessary adjectives and LY adverbs. Take them out and read the story.
I do not seem to write using an abundance of ly words. Using adjectives does bring interest and at times needed information to a story. As long as these words are not over used and a variety of them can be sprinkled into a story to add spic and a delicious flavor For me this is a good way to bring the reader into the story and show and tell as needed what is happening.

5. Did removing them change your story? Did that make it better or worse? Why?
If too many of these words are removed it would detract from the personality of the story and also make it somewhat bland for the reader. Proper nutrition is essential for optimum health and it is for a story important to have a balanced diet of various words, a good sentence structure, and a glance of spice and herbs to add flavor. Sspice and herbs can be adverbs, adjectives, and phrases which convey thoughts and story information in an interesting and understandable manner which depending on the target audience is understood in a concise and believable presentation of the story.

6. What are some of your worst grammatical habits in writing?
I do my very worst writing when I participate in NaNoWriMo. National Novel Writers Month is a great way to get the ideas for a story written, but it is not designed for creating the final draft. NaNoWriMo helps me write my first draft, then I need to edit, edit, and edit after completing this challenge.



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