Discussions At The Garden Bench

1. Let's talk a little bit more about the LY adverbs we examined in Lesson Three. Scroll down and read the version of Circle of Life below. How many LY adverbs did you see?

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*PoseyB* 2. Do you think the story's meaning was lost, or the imagery was diminished with the lack of LY adverb use?

The short answer is no.

*PoseyV* 3. Did you think this version of Circle of Life was easier or harder to understand than Lesson Three's version? Why?

Good question. Of course I was thinking it mush easier to read, but in fact it was much easier to understand--all around.

*PoseyP* 4. Find a piece of your own work that is heavily sprinkled with unnecessary adjectives and LY adverbs. Take them out and read the story.



*PoseyV* 5. Did removing them change your story? Did that make it better or worse? Why?

My impression is that my writing matures somewhat when I don't overuse LY adverbs.

*PoseyV* 6. What are some of your worst grammatical habits in writing?

I all too often write things and put a comma for a slight pause, and then a comma before a conjuction. Not sure how bad this is, but it always makes me stop and consider a re-write.