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Sunrise classroom for posting assignments & discussion topics #2 (BLUE ROOM)

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Jun 2, 2011 at 9:24pm
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Re: Assignment 4 - Part 1
Wow, this was brilliant. You just took us on a sensory ride. I loved it!
I noted how cleverly you use the sense of smell and sound:

*FlowerY* One small bag transformed my fake floral cabin into a baked cinnamon heaven.

*FlowerY* My seat vibrated in response, and as the lights changed from red to green, the beast growled as I coaxed her out of the station.

The visual of the mother holding the wailing child in her lap was also something that I liked. Your approach was different than most of us, you chose to tell a story rather than add bits of sensory images. That was a good choice too. *ThumbsUp*

Arpita
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Assignment 4 - Part 1 · 06-02-11 4:45pm
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