Erotica Harem

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CHAPTER: Chapter 3B

AUTHOR: David S.

PLOT: Joel and his girlfriend, Gabrielle have role play sex. He pretends to be a scared 18-yr-old boy at the hospital and she is his nurse who ‘teaches’ him a few things.

STYLE & VOICE: Joel’s point-of-view in third person

REFERENCING: modern day

SCENE/SETTING: In the bedroom.

CHARACTERS: Joel and Gabrielle.

GRAMMAR: Flawless! Once again, a lot of people have reviewed this chapter. My word document did pick up on this:
“and especially expected for teenaged boys.”

It is telling me that teenaged needs to be turned into teenage.

JUST MY PERSONAL OPINION: You’re probably wondering why I don’t post the entire story in my review. The reason being is that so many people have reviewed this chapter and in my opinion, it looks to be perfect. When I get to the chapters that only 2-3 people have reviewed, I will comment on different paragraphs of the story.
I like this chapter. It’s sexy and funny! The batman briefs crack me up! Can’t wait to read more. :)