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Rated: 13+ · Message Forum · Contest · #1722332

Rewrite my telly scene in showy deep POV and win an upgraded year at WDC

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Dec 20, 2010 at 3:37pm
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Re: Re: Re: Review of Sunglasses
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Max wrote:
I can't read Alex's mind, but I read his comment as a joke. The author has us inside Jack's head here, so the sentence in question is, in my view, excellent showing. In this context, I wouldn't want a graphic, proctologist's view of the muscle clenching. Instead, we've got Jack's sensation of being afraid via the muscle clenching.

Yes, I did misunderstand Alex's comment. I was too close to the 'show n tell' lesson that I failed to see the tree.
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