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Title: Prayer and Prey

Chapter reviewed: Chapter 3

User name: Vampyr14

Plot: Homecoming

Characters: Danny, Noah, and Isaac, Alice and William

Grammar: Good

Style/voice: Danny's and Alice's POV

Setting: Australia outback

Overall: Danny has second thoughts about taking his brothers with him after he had robbed the bank. Alice sees her home for the first time. I can only hope that somehow these two separate plots meet and make sense to the story. It feels like two completely separate stories at the moment. With each I can feel the hesitancy of both main characters. Danny and Alice don't know what they've gotten into, and don't know how to proceed. William has expectations for his new bride, and the brothers just look to Danny for guidance. All traveling a road they never followed before.

Errors. I found only one missing word.

A knock at back door made her jump. -- missing 'the' after at


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Matthew 19:26 But Jesus beheld them, and said unto them, With men this is impossible; but with God all things are possible.
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