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Hello to anybody reading this, I'm not new here in writing.com as a reader, but a newbie as a writer. If anyone would take the time to read my short poem "Periodic Table or Relationships" and offer and insight on how to improve my writing in poetry or in any other medium I would be glad to hear it.

I'm mostly looking to how I can write it in a way which sounds right. I know those who might read it have to understand basic chemistry, but that's not what I'm really concerned. Its just the rhymes seem a little off.

Anyway, any criticisms or praises will be both deeply appreciated. I mostly write to let loose some of this bored creativity stuck in my head everyday that wants to get out.

Thank You for Reading.