WDC Frontliners Novel Review forum

Hi there! This review is on behalf of . Hope you enjoy my thoughts!
PS: My reviews do not claim to be professional advice in any way, shape, or form. Take what you like and leave the rest!

That said, here are my thoughts and suggestions:
I liked the beginning. You drew the reader in with action and questions. Immediately you taunted us with the notion that there is something different about this main character, yet you didn't reveal right away just why he was the source of this destruction. Instead you leaked information gradually.

When you were talking about his anger, the word 'anger' itself got a tad repetitive. Maybe you could use some more ways to describe it, either with synonyms or by describing how it affected his body. Try using the five senses to describe anger. It will make that part more effective I think.

I thought you portrayed the storm well. Good job! A couple times in what followed you started with the 'was-ing' instead of the 'did.' Try to fix those.

You did well with the introduction of the savior and Dixim's height fear. It felt real. I like the character development we've gotten so far. Good start to the story!

Thank you for letting me take a peek at your muse!
Caroline