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The Sword of Light (2nd Draft) - Chapter 1

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My thoughts/feelings:
I think the scenes in this chapter were unpredictable; you won’t know what will happen next until you continue to read the next paragraphs. From this chapter, a lot of questions can be made; who was Dixim? Where did he come from? What kind of powers does he have? Who was the old man? And the questions go on and on, and will only be answered at the next chapters.

The way the words were used to describe the character’s feelings, thoughts and surroundings, were easy for me to understand, imagine and relate to; I was able to sympathize with him as he tried to hide from the villagers and save his life.

My comments/suggestions:

Plot
At the start of this chapter, climax was already built; the big chase that happened between Dixim and the villagers. The intense action scenes didn’t just stop there; he met a young man along his way who wanted to kill him, and he needed to cross to his destination, with the use of a rope. Lastly, I wonder what happened to him as “he fell away into darkness.”

Setting
I think Oaksville was a place in a middle-aged setting because of the presence of inns, bars, and villagers.

Characters
Dixim
He was just misunderstood. Whatever it was that he possessed made him a lone wolf.

Old Man
At the looks of it, he knows something about Dixim; maybe a lot of his true nature.

Keep on writing!