Erotica Harem

Setting: Still in Daniella’s bedroom. This was the chapter I was expecting a chapter ago.

Characters: I wouldn’t think this is the first time that Daniella and Aiden had sex, but it seems like this is the first time they did this much bondage and such together.

Referencing: I liked at the beginning there was some flashbacks to the previous books.

Plot: The main point of this chapter, I think, was to show Aiden feeling and doing things he never did before. It shows how much he’s willing to give in to Daniella.

Grammar: I didn’t notice anything.

Just my personal opinion: This was a erotica chapter and I think it did what it was supposed to do. I didn’t have enough comments to justify a line by line. I left the paragraph where I did have a comment. I’m sorry I don’t have much more to say. It was a good chapter and I think showing them together, helps with showing their relationship.
It also allowed for some more back story and gave a few more details about how your world.

Sephina

Line by Line:

When she first retrieved the silver shackles from the top shelf in the closet, he’d stepped back, surprised by the array of unpleasant memories that filled his mind. He didn’t refuse her request when she held them out to him, however. Three-inch-wide silver snapped with resounding finality around his left wrist, lightweight and cool against his skin. She left the remaining shackle open, hanging from his hand by a two-foot chain. He listened as Daniella explained the special titanium of the metal. “Conner developed them for protection,” she’d mumbled. The safety precaution part of the explanation eluded him, and when he asked her about it, he thought he heard blood frenzy. The reference softened his pecker ‘Pecker’ jolted me out of the story there. I don’t know if it fits the tone of the story. But that could be my own associations with the word choice..


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