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Mar 19, 2008 at 1:01pm
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Blindfold: Rev 1
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Hey, y'all! I have finished editing "Blindfold" based on all the helpful suggestions I've received. Obviously, I have a problem with passive verbs and stuff. I got some comments about doing more 'telling than showing'. Can somebody explain this to me?

Thanks!
Scott



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