Erotica Harem

Review: Crimson Cries

Chapter Eighteen

By DAwne

Setting: The airport--detailed enough to provide a great backgroudn tot eh action sequence that follows

Charactes; Aiden, doing hsi best to comfort Daniella in the killing she did, by admitting he had doen the same--its simple, they're getting rid of the bad guys and tehre are no prisons to hold them. Waht other choice do they have?


Daniella, at war with her own nature in doing waht needs to be done.


Plot: Basically,a fter landing, and knowing they are targeted, they change tactics, coem up on Simone, find out she destroyed Alleandros, and take her out. Well described and choreagraphed. I like Aiden's approach to the interrogation. He wants info and will wahtever means handy to get it--even torture.

Grammaticals: Only one thing looked kind of odd--incorrect grammar--

...more deadlier... I would have used far more deadly or far deadlier but more deadlier I was taugth to be incorrect grammar, like more faster--


Commetn: Fantastic, action oriented chapter, tnesion is high now and Daniella is running almost entirely on intsinct. Aiden can reign her in to a point but in the end, she follwos ehr desires for revenge, and I belive she ahs jsut cause. I also subsrcibe to Aiden's ideal, they're taking out criminal, after all, you can't simply bring them to trial and lock them up. There are no prisons for these beings so they msut be destroyed. I I got sucke din here and wish there was anotehr chapter to read. But I can be patient, really I can. *cheesy grin* Well done here.

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