Erotica Harem

Olivia;
Don't worry about it; we're get through it - that's what this board is for, is to learn and enhance our skills and writing.

You worked in a morgue! I'm so impressed. I wish I could do something like that (for my writing's sake), but I wouldn't be able to handle it, I'm afraid. I have an autopsy coming up in my novel, but I've had to research the info - so would LOVE to get your feedback on the chapter (I'm afraid I'll put too much in the novel and make it boring, so I'm trying to cut back some, but want to get the point across that the victim was indeed murdered).

Anyway, I'm enjoying reading your characters; I really do like Manny and Coop, I didn't realize they were not going to be main characters - but don't change anything that you're planning to do yet - let's see how it flows and then get feedback from the excellent writers in this group.

Hopefully, I can get back to reading more this week! Great job on chapter two with content, style. As for smell, perhaps you can describe the smell of the apartment, or the fragrance of the bath water on the body, such as the aroma of lavender, etc. She could have used a lavender (or some other scent) of bath oil, or perhaps the soap she used. Lots of possibilities...

Jon

Jon


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