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Feb 13, 2008 at 9:29pm
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Re: Review: Pretty Dead Boy: Chapter 6: Jon
Sephina;
Thank very much for the review. Your line edits are spot-on! I appreciate you taking the time to read the chapter and continue the story of PBD. WOW - I thought I was getting better with removing/deleting so many adverbs, but you found them all! *Smile*

Also, thanks so much for pointing out the POV shifts; I've been working on these!

Thanks again for such a detailed, line edit review! *Heart*


Jon


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