Erotica Harem

Hi DusktilDawn. I just enjoyed Physical Therapy Chapter 3. Here are some thoughts:

>> threading her fingers together and placing them behind her neck. <<
omit 'and placing them' ?

>> After I obtain his medical file…and talk with his brother— She moved to the laptop and searched the database for Dr. Richard Weston’s number. After she called his office <<
AFTER twice

>> Only then did she realize she held her breath. <<
I know how much you hate WAS, but I really think this should be WAS HOLDING.

>> and it was because of the outcome that followed that caused her to pack up, <<
awkward

>> “Dr. Dumont.” He dipped his head. “I take it Harry has given his blessing for you to talk to me?” <<
Good! My opinion of him just went up.

>> Her gaze followed the smooth line of his spine down to the back pockets of his jeans. He picked that opportune time to face her. Now she had good reason to blush <<
Cute

>> There’s issues here that you may not know about.” <<
I know bad grammar can be okay in dialog, but this grated. There ARE issues.

>> We had no other family to rely on so it was either me <<
on COMMA

>> “A traumatic event like that always leaves some sort of scars. Even for you.” <<
I didn't get "Even for you."

>> Either way, the question was inappropriate. “What business is that of yours?” she snipped back. <<
Okay, we've been through this before, so I know you won't like what I'm about to say. But, since I'm comfortable that you'll still like me :) I'll say it anyway.
I hate it when she becomes unprofessional. Snipping out a statement like this is not only unprofessional, but rude as well.
Granted, he made an inappropriate comment. But she should have been able to handle it more delicately, without lowering herself to his level. Just my opinion.

>> Her heart missed a beat as she fought to remain composed. He will not get a rise out of me, she vowed. <<
He already DID get a rise out of her!

>> “Harry has stalked before.” <<
Nice!

>> “Harry wants this woman back because he feels she owns him. <<
I don't recall a discussion of who dominated whom in this old relationship. So how would she know? Maybe I missed it, but I glanced back and didn't see it anywhere.

>> She paused. “Should I be worried about Harry.” <<
Question mark needed

>> “No. Not at all. Harry is harmless <<
Not true. He just said that Harry stalked his girlfriend, who needed a restraining order.

>> feeling it largeness envelop her small palm <<
its

>> she found she rather liked his touch and that was indeed strange <<
touch COMMA

SUMMARY: This was very good. Except for the one snip, I found her behavior much more believable and sympathetic than in prior chapters.
The pace was perfect, advancing the plot well. Great!

TimM