Sci/Fi Landing Pad

Thanks.... several good catches.. I'll fix them.
My thoughts on your thoughts...**


(Talking to himself, knowing the twittering chirp of his leg hairs couldn’t be overheard; ).**.(.”is he speaking to himself or is this his thoughts? )... Note the "...."
Yes, he's 'buzzing' to himself, and a thought need not be in italics as long as the reader knows it's a thought.

( Raising his antennae, Charon spread their feathery receptors, tasting the air.) ** ( To him they all looked and tasted alike.) ( as he tasted the air rising from the courtyard.) ( Charon flattened his antennae. It wouldn’t be wise to be caught sniffing around the Councilman’s wives.) *...no. the don't eat their young.

( Lowering his fighting claw with the spikes tightly folded to quell their fears, he motioned for them to close the doors.)
(Then, with his anger under control, he motioned for the doors)..**.He motioned for the doors to be closed above.... Yes he did, but now he wants to enter... I thought 'to be opened' sounded redundant.

Ah.. the POV thing
** ( Is it absolutely necessary to have us in his head. Could he make and excited buzzing ) He could...but my readers wouldn't know why...now they do. As with the next in Tomay's VP (Tomay snapped his talons softly in amusement. Knowing full well even a Pro-Council’s words became law as soon as they were buzzed.)
.. btw.. you didn't catch the VP shift from Tomay, back to Charon 'within' the next paragrap. A serious no-no.
I still don't know what's so bad about changing VPs.... One can't know what another is thinking. I let my readers know by letting them 'hear' the thoughts.

There 'will' be more VP shifts in this story.

just bob