Aspiring Authors

Hi

A powerful start to your story. It reminds me of Andrometor where the ship was alive.

You have tackled the scene nicely with a lot of credibility in the characters and setting. The ending was also a cliff hanger, keeping us entraced to keep reading. I enjoyed it very much, and really cannot give too much recommendation for improvement, except just wanting to know a bit more about Zeffa.

Across from her comma Fazzle suddenly stopped snoring but didn’t move.

Cheers
Tania
For an enjoyable read, check out

Invalid Item  This item number is not valid. #1120128 by Not Available.