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Here is the chapters I talked to you about. if you don't remember, it's a sci-fi fantasy drama (maybe a bit of adventure later). It's mostly a story about first meetings, a standart sci-fi galaxy and a magical illusionist woman.

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There is a 4th chapter in my port but I'm working on it. You can read it if you want