Ratatosk Writings - Poetry Review Forum

A nicely set out piece, using poetic form well. Lots of allusions and metaphors, but some were a little lost on me -

"To feel the moon elope the sparse"
"Treading the earth like dancing a knife"

I simply did not understand the allusions referred to here, and therefore I stumbled with the understanding of the poem as a whole piece of narrative.

Good dramatic textures though, so I would look at spending a little time reworking it.

It doesn't say in your portfolio whether English is your first language - this might be the problem. Some cultural understandings and expectations, whilst poetic in the natural tongue - don't easily translate into English language poetry, without explanation.

Best wishes and I will revist your portfolio. Shani

Hubble {/i}



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