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Title: The Time of the Treeling

Chapter: Prologue

Author: FantasyTeen

Plot: This was really good, I read your story a while ago but it's changed loads since then. I think this is the backround story of what I read before. It's a really intiging start and I would definately want to read on.

Setting: I loved the description of the castle and the treeling city and thought it was very well written

Character Development: We don't find out much about the characters in this chapter which is ok as it's only the prologue.

Just My Personal Opinion!: Great begining! I like this already, good job, I'll keep going.

You mustn't have realised but this story is repeated twice so you need to delete the second half.

I think you need to try and keep the same tense through the story or have an obvious time when you change it. I found that part of this was in past tense and part of it was in present. This is an example, if you want it in present tense

Their father, Rotiderian, king of the woodland elves, sat/sits in the middle of the room and quietly turns to motion for his three children to sit around him,

head. but/But where to?

Looking closer he saw that it was a women/woman,