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Hi Kristina, The sentence is okay as written. The editor in me is coming out, though. It's good start. Then I would do a edit, with the thought of using a good economy of words. Can I cut this down? Can I shorten it? Can I make it say the same thing? The knee-knee drought weathered weeds swayed in the troubled Chinook Winds. The ripple effect reminded one of ocean waves lapping onto the seashore. I live in SoCal and I see weeds that high and yellow all the time. I'm "assuming" the second question is not related to the first. I'd try to research it, but I think you can mention the owner, etc as long as you aren't defaming them or libeling them. Steph   |
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