For the Greater Good

hello

This is about the fifth book I've started writing since age nine, but I've resolved to actually finish this one! The stuff I'm submitting is pretty much a rough draft so any advice or critique is very welcome so I can make this thing less crappy. It's a story that came about from I dream I had that I then converted to a story on the way to the dentist to avoid thinking of my emanate tooth drilling, so it's come along way from the beginning, and I'm hoping I can bring it along the rest of the way and make something half way decent.