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"Forceful Refinding"   [E] by Fyn

Mini-review: I find this difficult to read. I like: "Bedtime yawned earlier" and "I glued on paper wings inked in dismissal and let them fly elsewhere."

It has a 'beatnik' 1950s feel (when vomit on the page was in vogue) but needs severe editing to properly flow and make sense. It's does use some poetic devices but I can't like it as is. I give it a 3.0.

How do you feel about rewriting and editing your work?

Well... it's a chore that needs to be done. Sometimes I enjoy the process but ofttimes I just forget. Contests with deadlines are difficult.

I have to be careful with poetry or anything short as one word added or cut can destroy the original intent, rhythm, rhyme, music. I've been known to maintain the original as a copy in a blog or reduced to grey-scale below the 'final' version.