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 |  | The Choice  [13+] Discovering the fountain of youth presents a unique problem.  |
| (4.5)  A review from "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  First Impressions: This is one of those stories that makes the readers sit up and think about the implications. I’ll be honest and admit that I have never given it any thought what would happen if someone with a terminal illness drank from the fountain. The indication in this story, or rather, the fear, was that life would continue indefinitely, but in the state that it is now, broken and in pain. That doesn’t bear thinking about. But isn’t the idea behind the fountain that it gives you eternal youth – so wouldn’t she become young and healthy again? It’s definitely worth reading the small print here – which, figuratively, the characters did, although that wasn’t the main reason why she didn’t drink. The love between Roger and Abigail was the heart of the story, and it was beautifully conveyed. You portrayed her quiet strength and his desperation very well, but more importantly, their love for each other came across loud and clear. Roger’s character as both scientist and a man in love worked well. Abigail seemed a little less distinct– she seemed to react to him most of the time, and her main contribution was her refusal to drink, wanting to make sure that he would go on regardless.  Suggestions: The story was very well written, as usual. I noticed a few typos – hardly worth mentioning, but I don’t usually find anything wrong with your stories so I’m going to: contributed more to the scientific and academic communities that most “than” instead of “that” “Are you out of your mind?” Roger exlaimed. “exclaimed” Or, based on what we’ve found here, that’s there’s even anything left “that” instead of “that’s”  Final Thoughts: It might just be me, but I felt the backstory about Roger’s brilliance and mapping process was a little long. It grounded the story, but the tale lost momentum in that middle part, especially after that opening where she refused to drink from the fountain – I wanted to know more about that. The fact that a fountain of youth could have a finite supply came as a surprise as well; another thing I hadn’t considered before but entirely plausible. There is no reason to assume that it would go on forever, yet I always did, as did the characters in this story. This was a very poignant and thought-provoking tale, and I enjoyed the read.
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