| Hi thereBdragons I discovered your item on Writing.com via random Read & Review and am sending the following feedback for your consideration. Positives I'm impressed with the amount of storytelling you were able to fit into just 300 words. You had an entire conspiracy to unseat the king with multiple parties involved! Great job. Suggestions Claude's initial response to the return of King Delbert seems a little off considering he was one of the conspirators that tried to get rid of him so he could usurp the throne. Why did he welcome Delbert back with open arms rather tahn try to convince everyone that it was a charlatan or a con man? Overall Overall, I enjoyed the writing and the amount of story that fit into this piece, although I think there's a little room for refinement. But good work so far! I hope you've found this review helpful. If so, please consider paying it forward by reviewing the work of another Writing.com author! Sincerely, Jeff "Rating & Reviewing Philosophy"
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