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 Goofing Off Open in new Window. [E]
Written for National Goof Off Day
by Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon
Review of Goofing Off  Open in new Window.
Review by Lornda Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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         I had a fun time reading your unique poem! I never knew such a day was even around. *Laugh* I totally agree with the first stanza, and I thought it was a good hook. I did read somewhere that it's true that having fun or laughing can reduce your blood pressure. I think a lot of people would probably want to do this everyday. *Wink*

         If I had to give any feedback, I'd say it should be under the genre of 'Comedy', because when you're goofing off, it usually entails something fun. There was a comma missing in this line: So[,] spend..., and I think when you're quoting the type of day it is, maybe use italics. It's a fun poem and updating the description would bring in more people to read it.

         Overall, a well-written poem! I thought it was entertaining, and a fun concept for the subject. I liked how you included some true facts about how goofing off can help your health. Too bad we weren't allowed to goof-off everyday. *Laugh* I'm glad I could stop by and read your poem. *Thumbsupgreen*

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