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Dreams Open in new Window. [ASR]
This is a diamante poem.
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Review of Dreams  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Greetings, Steph!

I saw you mention this on the Newsfeed and thought it looked inviting.

Dreams... Why does one English word encompass so vastly different experiences? The sleeping, semiconscious visions that arise from who knows where, and the hopeful plans for one's future, made with all cognizance and awareness. Then, there are good dreams and bad dreams... Well, that's where the word "nightmare" comes in - quite unrelated to the word for a female horse.

Your diamante poem captures the feelings of a nightmare, with strings of rapid fire words that layer in the dread and unease, from the subtle beginning to the climactic ending. May I ask - I know this poem is twenty years old, and I respect the archival quality as such, but this is bugging me - might perhaps the word in the center of the fifth line be "hurtling," as in hurtling down the mountainside? Because often, nightmares involve the feeling of falling or weightlessness. Also, I just noticed now that the word "unpleasant" is misspelled.

Aside from those little things, this is an excellent creation, channelling the frightful essence of those dreaded upsetting dreams that leave us afraid to go back to sleep.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *WingL**Heartv**WingR*


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