Hello Wildfire8470 , I selected "Craving KitKat "  from your portfolio to read and review, as part of the WDC: "Beach Party Raid 1" 
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July 23, 2025

  FIRST IMPRESSION
 
Oh ho the wonders and aorta spams of Caro...I mean the wide-eyed wild child. Brisk dialogue and psychological ponderings move this tale of two people in the tragic comedy of misdirected connections through torrid contemplation to a kind of safe harbor both Henry and Kit desperately need.

  THEME
 
Take a moment to understand the one you love. They are vicious sometimes because of the trauma of life; seemingly void of any care for what propels you through life, but what an amazing gravitational pull they have just at the point when I believe lust is abated and I only need Caro...I mean Kit's softness and nearness to be complete
 
  STRUCTURE
 
"Craving KitKat "  Is a fictional piece with a solid flow. The mixture of short paragraphs and extended ones gives the piece a subtle fluidity. It's form is fine both on its surface and in the deeper moments that require pondering.

  MY PONDER MOMENT
 
This was my pondering moment:

“She studied him with an expression that could fill with infinite affection, guileless innocence, or wanton lust, as quickly as she could drop an iron curtain, veiling malice, venom, and murderous intent."

I could never quite put my finger on that look. You capture that face as it is cupped in the palm of my hand. I could never raise my hand, but would anyone blame me. The torture!

  SUGGESTIONS
 
I suspect that "Cravings" is part of a much larger story. I would say that you have defined your main characters to live on in many chapters and many adventures. I love them. But then I have lived them. I suggest you enjoy the rest of the journey with them. I know I will.

  IN SUMMARY

"Craving KitKat "  is a wondrous tale about two people who should never be together and yet the dance of love is beyond human comprehension sometimes. A Jimmy Web line comes to mind: "I need you more than want you, and I want you for all time."
 
I hope my thoughts and impressions have been a help. Let me know if you have any questions about my review.
 
Kind Regards,

~Kenword~ 

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