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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: I felt this is a pleasently descriptive poem about a summer's rain.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: I was happy that I came across this really pretty poem. For me, it was enjoyable to read. Each and every stanza boasted it's own expressive descriptions.

I always find that summer's storms are the strongest. Those are the ones with thunderous noises, bright flashes of light, and lots of visual effects! I thought you successfully captured all of that, and more, in your summer storm poem.

*Check2*ERRORS: Once again, I can't help you in this area. You wrote this one well, with no errors at all that I can see.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I really liked your poetic words and stunning descriptions. You sparked many of the senses here, as we hear the rumbles of the storm, see the blazing colors, feel the drenching rain, and all else.

Good job thinking of all of those 'ing' words for the second and third line of each stanza! That played a very important part in adding uniqueness to this nice poem.

I liked how you opened with what was about to happen, and ended with the sun shining through.

In my mind, I can see everything which is going on, and I can imagine being one of those people inside watching the fierce stormy scene. Well done.

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: The first and third line of each stanza doesn't rhyme throughout all of your stanzas, except for in the second stanza, with past and fast. It's really no big deal, but in a near first impression, since it's near the beginning, it almost looked like you meant for those lines to rhyme, and ended up not rhyming the rest. I would change the third line to something like, 'The summer storm rolls in now...'. This would give the beautiful poem a more uniform look.

Other than that...How about a storm image to compliment your poem? ...Centering the poem...Blue font...

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