Another wonderful poem. I really liked the imagery you used in this poem. I liked the recurring ocean imagery; the way you return to it in each stanza--but with differences--is well done. One thing that would be fun with this poem is to play around with punctuation and capitalization. I notice that in your poems you capitalize every line. It might be interesting to play around with sentence structure and try a different style. Of course, it's up to you, your style is your style. The other suggestion I have is condensing that long line or breaking it up. It stands out, but doesn't stand out in meaning. Maybe even just taking away the word "waters" and keeping it as the crystal Carribean. There is a lot of water and ocean imagery, so you could let that image speak for itself. Otherwise, I really like everything about this poem. My favorite line is about the Tahitian diver because it brings to mind the very source of the pearls. Instead of focusing on the time at hand, you trace it all the way back to the diver--that's really awesome. I think your last line is powerful and deserves to stand alone. Overall, I think you have a really good grasp on poetry and imagery, evident in this poem. Keep up the great work!

Thanks again! And write on!

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