So, I was scrolling through your port and found this poem and wanted to read it (it turns out again). I was requested to give this an awardicon, but upon reading it again I was floored once more. What a beautiful poem. I can really feel the raw emotion involved in this poem and I would like to thank you for sharing that with our community. I like the way you captured the mother and her despair and I think you managed to reveal a little of your own as well. My favorite part about this poem is how it starts and ends with tears, I think you really tied it together in this way. Another thing I enjoyed is your use of punctuation. I find that some poets are afraid to experiment and I liked your use of not only commas and periods, but I found a couple of em dashes. I like the use of images from his stages of life (pedaling a bike and puberty), I think that really captures the child and forces the reader to experience what his mother is. I also think the imagery of the necklace ended the piece well--as something to remember him by. Overall, I don't really have any suggestions because I think you've got all the elements of this poem tied nicely together. Keep up the amazing work!

Thanks again! And write on!

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