The warmth of the couple's relationship comes through clearly in this poem. There is that feeling, which the reader grasps, that shows the soul-mate connection and comfort with one another as if they were one mind -- one heart.

Lovely!

Observations:

You have a rhythmic couplets with the refrain of "Let me feel," followed by a single line and then,followed by three ending lines without the "Let me feel" line.

I think separating the last three lines may be helpful. Thus the first two lines stand, one of which will have the repeat phrase, and the last line will stand alone, thus bringing a more visual and consistent impact to the reader.

"It is pleasant to sit quietly like this,
Dream the impossible,
And know you are beside me."

TRY:
Let me feel the pleasant quietness
Dreaming the impossible

Knowing you are beside me This left standing alone for impact.

That's just a quick reword and suggestion of how to continue the balance you've started the poem with in the first couple verses. I know you could come up with something more fitting.

Otherwise well done!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch






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