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| (4.5)  Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! Overall Impression Hello Elfin Dragon-finally published . Welcome to Writing.com.  My name is Elizabeth and I am here with your first R&R (Rate & Review) from me. Before going any further, I would like to give you an idea of how to read this. When you see the "L," it means "Line." The "S" means "Stanza." The opinions expressed are not a personal attack. I will offer suggestions and it is up to you to use them. I just want to help you along your writing journey. I enjoyed your poem. I love mythology and mythological creatures - especially dragons and unicorns. The way this is written makes it seem like the mythological person or creature is speaking to me. This is good. I feel sympathy for him/her/it. This person/being has been forgotten and the emotions behind this fact are able to be sensed. Stanza 1 L3: To...story.  S1: Put a comma after "you." It will help this line read better.Stanza 3 L6: And...unseen. S1: "And" is unnecessary here. The line will not lose its meaning without it.Rating   Other Keep up the great work! Write on! Again, welcome to WDC and good luck in all your endeavors. ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 01/23/2014 @ 10:56am EST