WdC 2023 Birthday Review Raffle - CLOSED

To qualify for tickets this year, the past participants voted that all reviews had to have at least 500 characters (you have that) and at least 1 suggestion or correction. You seem to be missing that. This review doesn't seem to qualify for any tickets.

But no worries! You can still enter it in lots of other activities around WdC. I've listed several in my dropnote about earning extra GPs. So, all is not lost!

When you do make a suggestion or correction, please make that stand out in a way we can easily see it without having to read the entire item. I really appreciate that!

Here are a few suggestions I saw that you could have made:

"...grabbed a pen that was on the table and began writing furiously on a napkin..." This could have been tightened up with, "...grabbed a pen from the table..." or something similar.
“'Just the checks please,' said Sherlock." I believe there should be a comma before "please."
"...and listened in on their conversation in the bar the night before as well." This isn't wrong, but you used "in" twice. Try maybe saying "...and listened in on their conversation at the bar..." Or maybe she "...listened to their conversation..."

I hope these responses help! I'm sure you are VERY disappointed not to have earned any tickets yet, but you didn't have the opportunity to read my comments between posts since I was so far behind. I do apologize and hope that things are more clear now.

Remember to post this review in other activities that will accept it and pay you GPs as well! Good luck and I look forward to seeing you back here!